I know "love" scenes are hard to write, but this metaphor really isn't a good one

„He watched pleasure turn her eyes to blue crystals, tasted her moan as he crushed his mouth to hers.“  
Nora Roberts, Savor the Moment.

Please tell me what is so sexy about crystals for eyes, even if they are blue? They are cold and hard and while they are pretty to look at, they are hardly sexy. That is an image that belongs more in a horror story than a romance novel."The Girl With the Crystal Eyes", anyone?

Comments

Dorte H said…
I am glad I very rarely write romantic scenes. I know what sounds silly; getting it right is much worse :)
Bibliophile said…
Most authors agree that romantic scenes and especially sex scenes are incredibly hard to get right, which is probably why there are awards for the really bad ones. Attempts at originality often go laughably wrong and it's incredibly hard to avoid flowery clichés and also getting too pornographic.

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